All Comments on 'Mrs. Hart's Ache Ch. 02'

What a well written opening. We meet primary characters and get background on them. We are teased with possibilities for the future and left wanting to read more NOW

This is one great introduction, well written with attention to detail!

Well written by someone with a good deal of USN time. I know as I had over 30. Keep the chapters coming.

I am USAF Retired, 1st Lt. I loved the way you describe the "unofficial" military. We had RF-4Cs and I'm very familiar with them, altho I did not fly them, I did the ground crew testing portions on the Annuals. Very well written. All military-inclined people should read this story.

HELLO all

This is a awsome stroy if you know just a bit about any of the services . if noit it is still a great read .

I hope every one look it over .

A old SGT

..very effective story - but "Auld Sod" isn't a native's term for Ireland, it's sickeningly sentimental Irish-American.

My public comment about Mrs. Hart's Ache Ch. 01 & 02

I bet your protagonist carries a mirror in his pocket so he can remember why he is so much in love with himself. When he takes a woman out, does she ever get a chance to say anything? Can he talk about anything that isn't in someway about him?

When I read the first couple of paragraphs I thought "This might be an interesting story". Having read the first two chapters, I'm not going to waste any more time on it.

Oh, I did like his apparent view that Dom/Sub relationships are not an acceptable excuse to abuse the Sub.

srgeek

is very annoying!

just tell the story, please.

btw less than a full page is not a chapter

really this is a waste of time. when does the story begin