All Comments on 'Mrs Robinson in the Nursing Home'
by Man_in_Chester
- 4 Comments
Anonymousover 13 years agoThis is the hardest story I've tried to read in a looong time! Absolutely no Rhythm.
digdaddyrichover 13 years agoVery hard to follow, and it's one of those stories that I had to reread a lot of the paragraphs to understand what the author was trying to present.
Maybe I'm just not reading close enough for this type of work.
Essentially I think the story could be good if the author would collect the train of thought of one subject at a time.
Man_in_Chesterover 13 years agoAuthorThank you for these comments. The story idea (and title) came from Sirhugs last February. There must be 1001 ways of writing it so I look forwards to many better stories.
The Report, with Section Headings and Subheadings, was written first and the Narrative was expanded between them and eventually overwrote them.
No doubt some people have noticed my mistake with the Swissrail timetable.
