All Comments on 'Ms. Boone & Mr. Stone'

What else can you say.

Well done

Really good hope for more to follow.

ch2 plrase but u hope bo 3rd partner stuff

Lol

you don't need to do that to make what's being moaned or screamed sound like it's drawn out.

instead of "YYYYYYYEEEEEEEEESSSSSSSSSS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!" which is by the way anoying as "fuckkkkkkk!" try doing a repeat that builds to CAPITALs. Plus only use one '!' a string of them is amature hour stuff and your story was better than that.

try this maybe.

"Yes, yes,YES. YES!" with her shuddering under me I watch her tilt back her head. A passion filled scream tears from her throat, the very windows shake with the volume of it. "OH My GOD... YES!"

Smiling softly I hold her trembling thighs and just watch as she continues to cum...but silently now. Her need to scream spent in one primal shreek.

Also try not to discribe breast by cup size. Compare them to fruit, or soft balls, or volley balls! If you need to decribe beach balls back away from the type writer for a bit and think about that one.

On the whole better than a lot of them on here. Maybe a bit more of a build up to the seduction would have been better than another sex scene. I call it heart strings and g-strings you have to make them both ballance to get good erotica

keep writing

M.S.Tarot

Can only imagine how she might look/dress in Hawaii! Maybe add some other (female) former students!!!