by JimBob44
I hate to be as picky as the editors on this site but a paragraph should never consist of just one sentence. Write a play!
I loved it. Such a cute and wonderful love story.
This was awesome. Your story touched me both emotionally and sexually. How do you do that? Thank you, and keep doing what you do best.
I loved this story. The best part is the understanding that average people can be sexually appealing. The idea that men have to be broad shouldered and well hung or that women have to be flat bellied with a tight ass is not accurate. You wrote a story that was sexy and more. Nice!
Loved the re-use/continuation of previous characters without it necessarily being a chapter 2. It was the girl's story, after all.
I enjoyed the story very much, I liked the way how the three came together and helped each other in their time of need when times were hard.
You need an editor. You shouldn’t want your editor. Your writing style combined with the slang and local color you provide add up to charm. I look forward to your stories, please don’t change a thing.
Third time reading it, so you have a 15 from me so far.
The character tees are so real, so everyday, that I can see them.
Really,really liked this story. Your 3 principal characters jumped off the page in my imagination. The tale was fun and very satisfying! This is the first of your nearly 400 stories that I’ve come across. I look forward to many more. Thanks for putting them out there for us to enjoy.