by UltimateSwitch
Okay, not very sweet at all. A good read. Good luck in the contest.
You hit the mood so well on this with just enough information to accept but enough missing to keep us guessing. Nice descriptions and action as well. Clever ending too. Best of luck in the contest!
Kept me wondering the whole time. Nice little bit of distraction and misdirection surrounding a hot little interlude. Good luck in the contest.
As the others have mentioned, I wondered what Donovan was, based on your description of him. Well written story and very erotic. Good luck in the contest. :)
The long paragraphs unbroken by any dialogue other than commands added a great deal to the hypnotic mood in the story. Nicely done! Good luck in the contest.
Well written... a story to keep me interested. Good luck in the contest.
This was a great story! I really enjoyed it and have to wonder as well, 'what is Donavan?' Anyway, great story and good luck in the contest!
For the most part, I thought it was a well done, albeit short piece of work. I found the story quite erotic, and enjoyed the characters. Welcome to the nightmare, er, contest!
(apparently I didn't submit the comment last time, so I will try to recreate it! LOL)
What is Donavan??? I'm dying to know! What a great story. Nicely written, erotic and mysterious. I really liked it.
My favorite part:
"She nodded, and his smoke and honey voice let out a sound oddly like a purr."
Great imagery! So sensual.
Good luck in the contest, you've got a very nice story here.