All Comments on 'My Awakening'

Very nicely told. Feels like a authentic memory.

Nice story, Nice pace. Be more attentive to your spelling. "Piqued" not "peaked" one's interest.

Very nice first story. I'd like to see a second chapter.

I do have a second chapter completed. It ran a little long so I split it up in three parts. The first part has been submitted and awaiting approval.

Please continue this! I know most of the stories on here are fantasy. But this one was believable.

Great story line. Keep it going. So much more can come out of this!

Wow!!! What else can I say, your story was told with so much feeling and emotion it was as if I was in the room with you. Please keep writing and please don't change from being a beautiful innocent "ugly duckling". The way you portrayed yourself in this story is how so many of us are, there is nothing wrong with that, so thank you.

I am excited about the next chapter.

All the elements are there in exactly the right proportions. Introduction and background were nicely done. The birthday gift was a beautiful hint without giving away the older sister's subtle seduction. You really brought the characters to life and made me feel the emotions they experienced. Good descriptions of the sex and excellent spelling and grammar. 5*

You established a brisk gait right from the beginning and drove, with tremendous forward momentum filled with continuing development, to a satisfying conclusion.

Brilliant!

Hemingway would have admired your style. Wonderful!

This got me SO wet towards the end! Well done!

Thank god for this!

My sister was not as loving as your character, but she was just as responsible for training my sexual desires. That was almost 18 years ago. We are still close!

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