All Comments on 'My Beautiful Surprise'

Is this fiction or has something like this happened to you? And if it has happened, you are a very lucky person and make me quite envious. Looking forward to your next one.

-V-

Hot story, liked it very much. But you got the names mixed up, I think. Is her name supposed to be Madison or Allie?

You need to clean this up. As already mentioned by another reviewer, you use the name "Allie", instead of Madison on several occasions. It makes me wonder if some passages are cut and paste jobs from another story?

Early on, you also say , "Mark defoliated everything south of his navel: his cock and balls..." yet, in the sexual encounter at the end, you say "As he thrust his ball sac bounced against his penis, then his legs. His black bush contrasted with her honey-colored ass." What black bush...if he defoliated everything south of his naval?

A good, erotic, story but the inconsistencies leave one wondering about originality.

Beyond amazing. Truly beautiful, sexy and delicious in every way. You took me into their world to share their amazing experience. Thank you for writing such a story. Touching and, oh my, sexy as hell.

This is such a good story (even though Madison switched to Allie a few times). The romance, the love, the deep connection you told of are incredibly beautiful.

Consideration for each other makes the story.

Great story about a loving shemale. So much better than the brutal ones that are prevalent! Thank you.