All Comments on 'My Best Friend Emily Ch. 04'

Hey I think the direction you're going is great. My only suggestions would be to let us know what Lisa and Emily talked about, and what is in Loisa's background to make her this way. Something happened somewhere back down the line to give her these, not just hangups, but extreme reaction. What I hope you don't do is split the three up. Good job so far. 5* for the first four chapters.

Your writing is solid and enjoyable, the characters are developing while keeping the sex strong.

Lisa definitely has something more in her past that's intruding, and I don't see it as an easy resolution, I'd say you have at least another 4 or 5 chapters in it, one or two with Emily and Lisa driving things forward, perhaps one with some kind of separation.

I could see Lisa running off, and Emily chasing her down or some such.