All Comments on 'My Best Friend's Crazy Fat Sister Ch. 01'

Great job in laying down the groundwork for these characters. Now it's time to dive into Ch.2, can't wait.

Also do you have news for us on The PTA Queen Bee & The Teen Rebel Ch.02?

The wait is killing me.

Ok, no action at all here but you did set everything up nicely. Seriously though, don't ever use the word vagina in a story like this. Absolutely no one uses that word outside a Dr office. It totally ruins the mood and flow of the story. Just delete it from your vocabulary.

halfway through the first page. Seems contrived. It'd be easier to read if any of the characters elicited a sympathetic response.

I really enjoyed this one retrofan, and I'm gonna read all the stories in the series

The guys who want to start wanking right away may not like it, but I find sex between people with complex personalities much hotter. Reading about their lives before reading about the sex is like enjoying dinner and a movie before proceeding to the main activity.

A comment regarding a previous comment: the word "vagina" has its rightful place outside medical literature. Consider the following poem that could not have been written without that word:

Her name is Gina.

She is from China.

I want to stick my dick in her vagina.

😜

Wow. Loving this story, lots of interesting character development. Can’t wait to see what happens next!

Oooo, ooooo, Oooo, I love the beginning of this story. You set up the next chapters quite well, just "nasty enough" to pique the interest....

Now, On To The Next Chapter!!