All Comments on 'My Cousin Jo and I Pt. 03'

Your naming of certain things (chester drawers instead of chest of drawers) are hilarious.

Absolutely loved it! Can't wait for the next chapter :-)

...and it registers a certain way in your head. The "Chester drawers" is good example. A lot of people say "It's a tough ROAD to hoe." Instead of "row". I had a girlfriend that always said "I need to CRIMP and save!" Instead of "scrimp". My absolute favorite; I worked with a woman who had believed most of her life, from early childhood that a Cher song from the 70's was titled "Gypsys, Chimpanzees". Instead of Gypsies, Tramps, and Thieves. That one cracks me up.

For the record very interesting story. I've really enjoyed it. 5.

he should have kicked his uncle in the nuts then explain what he heard.

Great story, looking forward to the next chapter, or chapters hopefully

I know it's only been 5 days, but I'm desperate for more! This is such a great story!

...are getting in the way quite a good story. Find an editor.

Loved how he foot-sweeped Bob--that was funny! Richard is a quick thinker except for when it comes to Jolene.

You're funny and you have some really good development here, along with the story premise. PLEASE eliminate those run-on sentences and this will be golden. 4

So entertaining, so far...your "simplicity" makes the story believable (from your point-of-view), and I can overlook the grammatical errors for the most part.

BUT, you really DO need some editorial assistance; if you cannot do it, find someone willing,to help...this story line is too good to ignore!

"MADDOG"