All Comments on 'My Date with Mum'

...good gawd, if ever an editor was needed, it is for what you've written......even more importantly, I take to task the people at Literotica who approve an author's submission....how you let this one get published is shameful......

I agree with the other comment, spelling was abysmal, and that put me right off. Far too rushed. You say the story is true - more like a fantasy you have. Your first story, if you are going to write more, run a spell checker before submitting it. And yet it could have been a good story.

but he's light years better than "SamuelX".

Your story was chosen for highlighting in the Story Feedback section under the ANDTHEEND thread, post #188.

I gave you a 5 vote for your effort.

Wow!!! Makes guys rethink about our lonely mom's. Hope there's a part two in the works....

The errors detract from what might have been a decent story, and then when I managed to decode the thing it was dull and generic anyway.

What language is that, Shakespeare? You are guna make me crazy. "I,eh," indeed.

... effort. Way too many mistakes, hard to read. Being better than samuelx is not saying much, I'm afraid.

The author of this excellent story of hot motherfucking is a 27 year old, with a creative and wonderfully dirty imagination. His hero, David, has a thing about his mother's cunt, as all normal boys do. Luckily, his mother has a thing about her boy's big stiff prick---she wants it shoved up her cunt! David and his mom both know the best place for any boy to unload his young balls---right up his own birth canal, his own mother's twat. I wish we had more such stories from this gifted writer.

There is no real story to this... no seduction... they go to the ball and in the next paragraph they are making out... wtf?

Spelling and grammar differ from one part of the "English" speaking world to another. The version used in Great Britain (the origin point) is very different from that of other parts of the world. It is entirely possible that someone living in England has a bit of a twinge or is rankled each time they read a story written using American English due to all the spelling and grammatical errors.

So,

Is there a chapter 2 in the making?

I found this story a bit too rushed for my taste. No mother in her right mind would jump in the sack with her own son this quickly despite how hard up she may be. It's unrealistic. Besides I enjoy the journey more than the actual sex. There was absolutely no build up to this story. In sentence one mom is saying thanks for reaching my evening to move directly into a kiss. In the very next sentence we have a weak token of resistance, and then in sentence three she is stripping their clothes off to jump his bones. Give my a break.

Chapter one should have been on the respectful date with a hint of only a token amount of the son wants from the date.

Chapter 2 should have been all about the mother's resistance. She knows she has needs but today's society really looks down on incest.

Chapter 3 should be the seduction plan to break down such resistance. It would mean a series of dates not just one.

Chapter 4 would be the sex itself. This is very important. Build up with out this is just a tease. I hate teasers.

And then chapter 5, the aftermath be it good or bad.

Having those steps in the story is critical for any good story.

Real? Not even in your dreams.