All Comments on 'My Daughter's Friend'

Well Done! 5 Stars! This was so evocative, and quite compelling.

Overall, I enjoyed concept of the story, and what you were able to say in the 750 words; however, it really didn’t do justice to the concept. I’d love an expanded version of this story idea.

Very few writers can produce a real interesting story in 750 words and you offered nothing new.

Unbelievably erotic. Missing context but wildly exciting. Prologue and follow up needed to fill my fantasy.

750 words are a challenge for sure, and you did better than most. I second Sparrow69: the soul's definitely there, but something feels just -slightly- out of reach. If you do revisit this in an expanded version, I think it'll be a winner.

Loved the outline of this story of young control over a friends mother who doesn't feel pretty yet must be because of the attention given by her daughters friend. This could venture into a wonderfully, sexy story of younger girls control over her friends mother. Maybe have the mother strip for her, go down on her, beg for sex, and eventually forced to go down on her own daughter. Fill-in the words as your outline is excellent for as before, a very sexy story.