by ArthurG77
I know what knickers are but still love panties better. When reading a story using only knickers, I just substitute the word panties in my head and keep on reading. Good story, every young man's dream. Have to wonder if Mike was part of the setup or not, guess I'll just have to read chapter 2.
Without a doubt one of the best milf stories I've read in a long time! Great little read, amazingly arousing, very believable, and sooo kinky! Haha thank you for sharing!
Oh what a read, as the title says it's written for the wrist, fast unbelievable but all a dream.
A very well written erotic story.
I hope to see more of the kinky erotic sex that the two of them have soon.
I like reading about older women that have young studs fuck them half to death and still want more.
I did want to see him shoot his load so deep in her cunt that it would take a couple of days for it all to drip out of her. Perhaps that will happen in the next chapter.
Thanks for the read.
Thoroughly enjoyed it. You set up a very erotic situation, made the hunter the hunted without him even realising it. Your description of the action was great as well. Personally I find it hard to stretch out the action in my own writing, but I think you could benefit there as well. Don't worry about translating for American English if you don't want to. I use the occasional word of Aussie slang and my editor finds the worst of it, but sometimes I feel it's the right word even if some people may have to look it up. You'll get the odd troll tell you that a mummy is a corpse in bandages and a mommy is a maternal parent, but just ignore them, I do.
You say that it was based on reality. Does that mean your next chapters are already determined? You could take a lot of fun directions from here if you have the freedom, as others have suggested.
I look forward to your next piece of work.
Reminds me of a neighbor lady that lived across the street from me when I was about your age. I used to mow her lawn and I lost my virginity to her. We had a very lusty relationship that lasted on and off for over 10 years until I moved out of the state.
Everything in the brackets was superfluous. And made it hugely annoying to read.
Very good story about real people doing real things. Very erotic.
Hello ArthurG77. good thumping read
there dude! HOT and erotic ! I had no
trouble with the translations, frankly I think
it is neat to know what other countries call
things. I have read Rumpole of the bailey
and seen a lot of the brits comedy
on public telly R U being served; Spencer
keeping up appearancs and others. I am
giving u a 5 as I am 48% English anyways and
yeah I really liked the story, 2 thumbs up!
Your story is believable, the writing can be better. Find a Literotica editor to help.
The Eagle gives 4*
And the Aussie should talk I have never heard an Englishman say BARBIE!
Nice work for a first story! Can you find an editor? There were a few problems with missing apostrophes and improperly capitalized words (but nothing too bad). I think the story would flow better if you left out the "American translations" - I'm American but I am also quite familiar with "real" English and the translations are unnecessary and distracting.
How about fucking her just under your friends nose, tell her not to wash her pussy after
the fuck, playing with her pussy sitting at the dinner table right under friends nose, taking close up videos of you fucking her ass and later show it to friend about a mature ass you banged lately....friend does not have to know it was his mom. And make her do lots of kinky things.
Good story, don't bend for the yanks, they should learn to spell and to use English rather than American, hope to see more, by the way I am Aussie, so if you are going to put in American Translations the you better do the same for us down south
Cheers
Neil