All Comments on 'My Girl Next Door'

Nice story. Jenny a bit underdeveloped as a character. Ditto Kim. Towards the end I didn't see why his interest in here except you told us. The idea I'm trying to get across is that it is more effective if you show us by the words and deeds of the characters what their traits are.

Thanks for writing and especial thanks for writing in a minimally erotic genre

Mr. J’s mangling of the English language with a contrived senior citizen speech pattern, was stupid, totally unnecessary, and very distracting.