All Comments on 'My Introduction to D/s Ch. 02'

Nice finish but a little rushed. Could have been another chapter in LA to really end it.

Well SCORPIO, I have to agree with 'oldwino' that it was a "nice finish but a little rushed". You could have given us another chapter in LA and some details about Mike's 'convenient' suicide to really tie up the lose ends. Looking forward to your next effort! Pete.

Still not my area of preference but a well crafted story is always a pleasure to read. Keep at it and thanks for sharing your talent.

Scorpio,

What a wonderful, loving story. I would be happy to be in that situation.

Thank again.

pj

I loved the story. The way you showed the difference between in pt 1 and 2 between a loving D/S partnership and a sadistic one was wonderful. I was longing to be Janice, right up until you invited Carla to move to LA and join the family. The conversation in chapter 1 about how sex did not mean love was so good. Carla could join them for a night or two and Janice could trust Nick to always love her. So then she arives as a plaything for the night and suddenly becomes a second wife. Sorry you lost me there.

The first ending was better than the alternate ending. Both were good, but I preferred this one

GREAT STORY TELLING, WELL DONE;)