by Miss Jane
Very detailed and nicely written. Extremely erotic and stimulating...hope to see more like it.
This story practically involves all the things that turn me on! I literally get weak in the knees and can't speak when I see a man in uniform (esp those white Navy uniforms) WOW. And when the guy pulls her head back and kisses her neck!! That alone sends me straight into an orgasm. And don't even get me started on how that guy lasted so long..he would be a keeper! I loved this story!
-Whitney
This is a wonderful romantic story- as far as it goes. However, it could use a more extensive build up and more character development. The love scene very good, but it is rather brief, and ends somewhat abruptly, and needs to be continued. The use of the present tense is a drawback; this tense is not the proper way to narrate a story, although it has become a fad in recent years.