by rubysen
Abruptly ended, good description. Will be better if you put some 'bangla shanglap'
Want more!
Good build up but abrupt end. One thing is very obvious as strange custom that a grown up 18 year old girl sleeping with the parents or in the same room and parents decide to make love.
I am told bengali women are the best - enjoy your self and write them - as you do write well - keep it up - hope you have initiated others in your family
"I was scared she might see me watching and closed my eyes"
That sentence was the crux of this story for me. Shutting of eyes to hide is so characteristic of a small child. From that point her growing understanding and love of her parents were the main point. Very Good
Pretty good story.... I didn't care for the first scene of seeing the mom and dad having sex. I just don't believe they would do that with an 18 year old in the same room. If they did it would be very subtle with neither of them out side of the covers.
And yeah... it just ends so...