All Comments on 'My Mom is Hot'

This probably sounded hot in your head but on paper it was bad. ** and that is being generous.

Your idea is hot but the way you present it is a turn-off from sentence one. I've seldom read a piece that's so bereft of adjectives and feeling.

Normally, a person's writing skill tends to increase, as he or she continues to craft stories. Sadly, your skills haven't.

Like how you didn't over describe events.

I was visualizing my mom and I and watching my ex-wife with our son and with his girlfriend, also.

It could have been edited a little better for punctuation, etc but overall, I gave it a 5 because it kept me hard throughout the story. Please do write more!!

This also goes for writers, some are good and some are not. Why do we pick them

apart as we do, if you can read them enjoy them. Remember nobody is perfict ha!! ha!!.

THIS IS JUST MY COMMENT.

It's not enough to have good ideas, you have to present them in a way that flow and not so badly written that it disrupts story. A little development wouldn't hurt either.

Grammar is the difference between knowing your shit and knowing you're shit.

I watched my cock moving back and forth inside my mom's pussy. My pelvis smacking into her tight ass with each thrust. Reaching around and fondling her boobs.

Author must be very young, reading the phrases used. Almost childlike. But it was so hot I gave it 4 stars anyway.

Bill S.

Reads like a 10 year old wrote it.Hopefully you are old enough now to understand good sentence structure and write a good story.

As Paul Harvey use to say, and now the rest of the story. Can't wait for the rest of this story.