by lurchman007
Loved it. :) 4/5, interesting plot, characters, and funny parts here and there ("in case you're wondering...green card").
What a naive kid, though. "The talk" at age 15, and he didn't spend every day since his pubic hair sprouted jerking off.
You could have had a 5-star rating, but you only got 4 because you used the word "I" in several spots where you should have used the word "me". That aside, the story is every man's dream! Two sexy and very sexual women to enjoy in all the variations of ffm situations! Enjoyed it. Thank you.
Thanks for your feedback.
legsfeettoes: I'll go through it to find my errors, but in the event that the word 'I' was used instead of 'me' where one of the characters is speaking, it was probably intended as the way they talk. I will check on it though.
cock4use: Maybe the (green card) thing was a bad idea on my part. I was trying to make it sound a little more realistic.