All Comments on 'My Neighbor Pt. 01'

Stop with the emojis! Your writing style is incipid.

Fuk outta here.

Ach, ignore the anonymous trolls, what have they ever contributed to anything? The story was funny, sexy and believable, and with a cheeky little twist at the end. Somehow I just know that your next story will be even better ;) Oops, I just used an emoji...

I am new to writing and would appreciate more constructive criticism! Love - Molly

While I've also made some writing/editing errors in my work, try to focus on syntax and grammar. Autocorrect is not always your friend, and be careful with your use of words or phrases. Don't believe I've ever seen/heard of a fifty-something male referred to as a "lad". Good luck with your subsequent chapters. ~Monica

Thanks this is super helpful!!!

I like this story because I can see it easily happening. Nothing really happens, but it captures the uncertainty of both characters pretty well. Both of them want something to happen, but neither is willing to take that one big step. It ends pretty abruptly, but isn't that exactly how a scene like this WOULD end. You can almost feel the ache coming from both people. Really good story! Thank you!