by Jack1107
Love this series, keep up good work, can’t wait for another episode :)
This is a very entertaining read. Thanks for sharing!!
GOD I HOPE YOU KEEP THIS STORY GOING. IT IS SO GOOD. I LOVE IT. THANK YOU!
Write. Read. Then alter.
It stops Tom becoming Paul.
I really enjoyed these 2 chapters,
and am eagerly awaiting ch. 3.
These ladies sound quite sexy.
Really liked the first two chapters and am looking forward to more!
you really have not listened to the advice given to you in the first chapter.
This reads like the user's manual for an ikea sofa ... get an editor, decide if it's Paul or Tom ... do not write in copy paste style ...
A pity really as "mature" stories are my favourite ...
Please ignore the anon idiots. This is a free site for the readers because none of the writers are paid. It's one of my pet peeves when people bitch about grammar etc. It's not like you have a professional staff of editors at your disposal. I would love to see this story continued.
Rereading this story, just as enthralling as it was the first time. Another well thought out and written chapter. I look forward to reading the next. I appreciate your and your Muse's imagination and abilities to bring it to your story. Thank you for sharing your vision and talents.