All Comments on 'My New Next Door Neighbour for the Summer Ch. 01'

Hi, The story is in the mature section, it may have been a little better if the ages of the two characters had been established, I didn't know at the end whether the superman with the 9"cock was an older man, or young man.

...Clare/Claire was described as "45-years-old" as she stood on the steps to Alan's homr. Alan was described as "a much younger (than Claire) man" in the chapter description.

My only gripe: Why the "nine-inch cock"?

-Rei

Thanks for the feedback. Slopping editing let the Clare / Claire typo occur. You're right, I should have established ages more clearly. Alan is in fact 42 at this point in time.

So what's wrong with a 9" cock. Works for me... literally.

Cheers SB1

Thanks for your feedback.

Agreed. Need to get better at this. As this is only my second posting to this site I am still working out some of the finer points.

Cheers

SB1

Dear Author, Not a bad start for a newbie! Read both of your stories and found them to be very expressive and 'hot'! Gave them fives and look forward to your future output. Thank you for your stories. jntiques

Show, don't tell us when someone is coming. Screaming they're about to come and that they've arrived is so lazy and not sexy. Whenever I see, "I'm cuuuummmmiiiing!" I hear it in Oprah's voice like when she makes a big announcement. That's not a slam on Oprah, but it's probably not what writers envision when they throw that overused trope out for us to roll our eyes at.