All Comments on 'My Parent's Neighbors Pt. 01'

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AnonymousAnonymousalmost 6 years ago

Do a part that's them getting together!!

CliterateDykeCliterateDykealmost 6 years ago

I liked it a lot you use "toned" & "buff" too frequently. Try using other words. Once you've made tge point, trust that your readers can remember & don't bother being redundant. Also, your bio page is completely devoid of any info which around Literotica pretty much signals "dude". I get that hit from yiu writing as well. I hope you avoid the horrible metaphor of referring to a clit as a tiny dick when we get to the sex scenes. 😎 Good work. Solid 4 stars from this out & happy lesbian.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 6 years ago
Bloody hell!

Talk about over-written!

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Happily married straight male who loves the outdoors, gardening, photography, and staying fit. I tend to write when the weather is abysmal, and I don't want to go outside. I have a few stories in the works, but it may be a while before I finish them enough to publish. I wri...

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