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by Bazzle

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AnonymousAnonymous6 months ago

3 stars, very rushed, needs a lot more description and less staccato type comments about what's going on.

BazzleBazzle6 months agoAuthor

Thanks for the feedback.

It was written as a little ditty to a girlfriend at the time. It's sat on my hardrive since 2008. So not rushed...stewed!

AnonymousAnonymous6 months ago

In the second paragraph, you're talking TO her instead of ABOUT her! You need to decide!!!

BazzleBazzle6 months agoAuthor

thanks for the feedback!

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Smoking, drunk and occasional wetting themed author Can be found on both Reddit and Twitter. Yes my stories are not everyone's tastes. Bit strange, not very erotic. Hope you enjoy reading. Please let me know!