All Comments on 'My Pregnant Wife Ch. 02'

So there is this guy Keith and there is also her Dom? And there is a Meshy and a Girl Meshy? Two different women? "Girl Meshy, will you obey Girl Meshy, will you obey our submission to me?" Who are you talking about here? Why is Keith cynical in the first page then concerned when she has to worship her doms feet? "Then drink of my golden nectar to express this love." When you mention "golden nectar" are you taing about piss? At this point I'm not ever sure who the fuck is marrying who?

This was written while i was extremely tired and my editor is away. I will make the changes. Thank You for pointing this out. Keith is Meshy, or girl Meshy, and her Dom's vanilla friend. Meshy has a fear of feet and knows it can seriously traumatize her.

So Keith goes by the name Meshy and Girl Meshy? Is Keith a girl? Keith is a friend, not the guy she is marrying, right? Then why does, "she" the one in the collar who is pregnant and getting married or hand fasted, have to obey Keith?

And fear of feet? Okay, very left field, but also a good quirky kind of detail to help the reader get to know the characters. Unfortunately, I'm still unclear about who is who, and which name goes with which person. Best to stick with ONE name per person, whether it's "Girl"meaning the person is a female AND she's too insignificant to get a real name; or "the girl" meaning the character is either insignificant to the story or her basic anonymity is part of the story. But to give a new character a male's name, then give him two nick names one of which is the word "girl" now you're just trying to be confusing aren't chya?

So... is this chick married to Keith but getting hand fasted to her Dom? Why does she have to obey both her Dom and Keith?

I don't want to discourage you from continuing this story, but I really urge you to work with an editor and make sure your story is ready to submit, before you submit it.

Sorry Sorry. >.< I need to stop typing late at night. I had meant to say Keith is Meshy's friend. Keith is the one doing the ceremony. Meshy is the submissive, hand fasting her Dom, Phelan. In the ceremony to also accommodate the fact that it is also a collaring ceremony along with being a hand fasting ceremony, they call her Girl Meshy during the collaring part. Meshy is actually myself, this story a dream, a hope of mine to come true. I have a sever phobia of feet, only second to my phobia of spiders. I had added that part just to keep the connection between myself and the character and also to show her devotion that even though she is scared to death of feet, she would kiss the very feet her Dom walked on if it meant proving herself and being the best submissive and lover she could be. My editor was and still is on vacation, one of the reasons part three is still laying in wait. Thank You for Your comment and bringing this to my attention. I had submitted the edited version of this part but it has not yet been put up. I hope it will be soon though. Have a good night.

That bride is a true submissive at this point anyway. I had a friend who married a beautiful Japanese submissive, she even bowed, with "yes my husband" to his requests. But as time went on, she slowly gained power. Who woulda known she was a "black belt"? Finally the honeymoon was over, and she worked him over, and the household was under a new realm. Yous is a good story though. Guess we gotta wait and see what happens next..