All Comments on 'My Sexual Family'

Very good first effort. I do hope you intend to carry on with this story, as I can't wait to see the sister get her turn. Keep it as natural as it feels now.

keep it up, a follow-up is a must ... I can't wait

Xcellent start: don't be afraid to xplore the bi-sides of both sexes. Also, the heavy equipment operaters may decide to withhold their favors from Mom unless certain conditions are met....

If this is tuly your first ever effort writing fiction it is amazing. Regardless, the story is very well told and written. There is certainly room for further erotic tales, but I am anxious to see how your style goes with other themes. DO KEEP WRITING!

very good job.

Very, very hot! It seems you have lived this story within you since the passion is embedded in your work. As a bimale, your story had the "attention" of every part of me. Very lucky brothers. Please continue. Thor.

Terrific first post, KK! I hope you can continue the saga, or we can look forward to other stories as well!

Thanks for sharing your work. You have real talent.

The writing, on almost every technical level, was extraordinary! I might sound like a Doubting Thomas here, but I get the sincere feeling that you've written LOTS before this, even if you haven't shown it off publicly before- you've got a sense of style, technique and virtuosity which seems practiced and skilled.

I've been writing, professionally and privately, for almost two decades and if THIS is your first "spin" around the public block, I would wholeheartedly encourage you to keep at it and try to turn a few bucks at this sometime! You, m'dear, have TALENT.

The dialogue is believable, the narration is sublime, the setting/nuances are rich... all the elements required for telling a good story are there. The story itself, honestly, seems just a tad unrealistic (in regards to convenience), but in many cases, the story is incidental to HOW the story is told (much like the phrase, "It's not the joke you tell, it's HOW you tell it that gets the laughs.").

I applaud your choice of taking the high road with your storytelling- keeping it simple yet flavorful. I see too many people, too often, making an obvious attempt to "go over the top" with erotic fiction. None of that exists here- all the "strong language" shown here is appropriate to the situations your character finds herself in, which is as it should be. It read like a "True Account" as opposed to a "Fantasy-Cum-Romance" farce. Not only was it a pleasure to read, it was a technical piece of well-crafted intrigue.

If you have a Part 2 planned, I hope to see it soon!

What a great story, very erotic and very well written. I hope that a follow-up is in the works.

Bil

What a great story, very erotic and very well written. I hope that a follow-up is in the works.

Bil

Please continue. It is one of the best i have read in a long time!

Keep up the good work!!

Your story had real feelings and truth to it, I hope you will continue the story..

You've definitly got talent flowing through your veins, for a first attempt, you've done so much better then I've seen from other authors who've been writing for ages. Please don't keep us waiting, part two is sure to be just as good, if not better then part one.

Sexellent story. Very detailed and erotic. Keep up the GREAT work. I am sure you are causing orgams nationwide.

Your work is great. It was written in such a way that not only did I feel I was there watching, but that it came from personal experience...the best combination there is. I was left wanting to hear more of the story and hope that not only will you continue it, but that you will write more as well.

This writer is in for very good votes . I so hope he or she keeps them comeing, as this story did for me. CATT

Very very nice! I'm not into male bisexuality, but your story was very well written. It kept me interested until the end. You've definitely got the "gift". Please keep it up.

The scenario you came up with was obviously the result of either a well developed erotic imagination or perhaps something witnessed?

I also feel you have written before as it was extremely well done. I look forward to the next several installments, don't just stop at one more.

I enjoy the incest category without personal experience, but it seems a bigger turn-on.

Keep up the great work.

Fearless

Also here you made somebody cum hard! ;-)

Can't wait for Chapter 2! :-)

Drop the first paragraph, it's unneeded.

Great first chapter of what I hope will be many more. Very well written, you have a delightfully nasty mind and a definite talent for writing, and I'll be hoping for the next chapter soon.

Looks like you hit a home run at your first-at-bat. Well written, good dialogue, excellent grammar and terrific suspense. It's a shame and a curiosity that "dear old dad" always seems to have met an untimely death in scenarios such as this. Ah well, his loss is our gain. Please keep the story going. I can't wait to read about the mother and daughter.

I felt as if I were right there with the character. Your attention to detail is excellent. Bring on the next chapter, I can't wait!

I have to agree with all the other comments, you have a talent, please keep writing.

Very well done......The sort of story that keeps you wet all through

the story was very good you could have left off the first few lines. not only talking about your story but it seems like every guy in the storys have huge cocks. funny how that is when normal size of cocks are 5 or 6 in.

That was a lovely Story. Please continue

Great story I loved it I'm very surprised it was your first one. I hope you keep it up and I hope to be reading the second chapter soon. Very good job keep up the good work.

I have been a great fan of erotica which come close to describe incestious relationship and i can say i loved the story only thing is desired that author should stick more to buildup of the sexual tension .

Great story. Loved every word. Can't wait for part two.

All I have to say is when do we see part 2....please?

Please!

can you get grandma in on the act?

it has a nice lead in to the sex. i like all the sex play. a lot of fun to read!!

This tail had the two things I dislike-- huge tits {why do most women on this site have DDDDD or bigger tits???-- at 40+ her nipples would be looking at her knees}

The second id bare pussy mounds-- or a "landing strip." What's going to land there? Mosquitoes? Flies?