All Comments on 'My Sister Is a Naughty Nurse'

You did rush a few parts

but over all very enjoyable.

The end was abrupt and felt like just

the beginning of their story...

Is a boner killer.

You hurried everything up too much. For the 10k she should have been made to pay more dearly, especially since she experienced her first ever orgasms. Her first orgasms plus 10k. I'd say she is a lay that got alot out of a payday. He should have had the built in camera on his ipad recording the last two encounters and used them to profit by after her marriage. Besides, whatever the outcome, the end was simply sliced off with no real wrap up or ending to the story.

More like thucka-thucka-thucka...But thanks for trying.

I disagree with the earlier comment. I don't think you rushed this story, your pace was terrific.

I look forward to reading more of your stories.

Love your style of writing. I know it's not easy. This story can be extended slightly and sold on amazon and make you a good buck. Except they dont accept bro/sis stories :(.

Anyway good writing, with lots of creative language use, gave you 5 stars for this, not something i normally do, unless it deserves it.

"The name 'Nigella'...

Is a boner killer."

I really hate to see absolutely dumb-ass critiques that have nothing at all to do with the story. If reading the name "Nigella" makes you go limp, perhaps your should see a doctor; there's something more wrong with you. Nigella Lawson's name is the feminine version of Nigel, Ms Lawson's father. It is also a wonderful spice, especially fitting for Ms Lawson, who served as Bad Nurse's namesake.

There are weaknesses in the story you could have critiqued, such as the back story being given short shrift in the telling or the obvious telegraphing of the outcome. The plot line reminds of an O. Henry story, but lacks Porter's wit and surprise ending. The story was an interesting variation on the standard blackmail plot, and for that alone, worth reading. But all you could say was you went all limp dick over a name.

Sheesh.

mostly because the sister sounds super hot. I do agree with those saying it was a bit rushed. This could have easily been a couple chapters. You need more detail and build up. The back story was fine, but could have been a little better to make us care about the characters a little more. Overall, the story is fine, you do seem to have a thing for Madmen, though. haha.

Nurses don't wear white DUMB ASS, NOT FOR YEARS. Maybe decades asshole. Most women are not sluts as you think.

good story and don't listen to the rude comments the story was well done anyone harping on the technical details missed the point of the story

I got a fucking hard on just from thinking about this story. I wish my hot sister would do this shit to me- I fantasise about getting all of those things. I would really like it if you extended this story or have a continuation- I fucking love it. I would pay my sister double the amount for this- she is really a major part of wanking and I want her to wank me. You got it- you lucky son of a bitch. A footjob would have also been nice and maybe some anal

Hey Timmy, it's a fucking story jerk off. Are you always this rude? Does being that big of an A hole make you feel superior?

Another chapter cumming?

Loved the story and they way his sister changed her attitude. Looking for more...

All I am going to say is continue

Lol, if he didn't touch his dick at all for weeks, he would have blew like a faulty rocket exploding on launch, blowing his load as soon as he bottomed out on the first stroke, hehehe!

He should have abused the hell out of it for those two weeks, desensitizing it and then jacked off a bit before she showed, then wear her ass out (heh;) all night long!

Pretty unique story! Cant recall reading a plot along this line before! Thanks!

But indeed, the ending seems rushed. More descriptions would be better.

This was such a deviceive relationship

I'm guessing you are a Brit, using "pounds" as well as "dollars"...

Why not just stick to clearly saying Mum (another story) and declaring yourself as British if that's the case... I think I saw first and ground floors in some story, whereas first and second might be expected from someone in N America.

Lucky naughty nurse, she has the perfect Paramore. Being shallow and marrying an unattractive man with a small weapon she would definitely be searching for a lover capable of satisfying her needs as well as being discrete. What better lover than a man she could visit and have over to her home without making up extravagant excuses and gambling on getting caught cheating on her rich hubby. It's a win-win all around. I may be wrong, but I need to disagree with UKguy1959. I don't believe you are a Brit. I'm leaning towards you being a well-educated (Probably in the UK) Asian fellow. Your writing style is too formal, but not in a bad way. you write really well. 5 stars