by Garret2007
It looks like you had it edited or reviewed it yourself before submitting. Good story so far. Needs more sex though.
This has very good potential for an interesting series - great start - just a little curiosity on the part of the brother - sex will come into it slowly I should imagine - just roll it out slowly in short chapters - better build up that way
This has very good potential for an interesting series - great start - just a little curiosity on the part of the brother - sex will come into it slowly I should imagine - just roll it out slowly in short chapters - better build up that way