All Comments on 'My Sister's Friends'

GREAT STORY! LETS HEAR ROUND 2 IF YOU GOT IT!

Looks like you really got tallent! Keep writting!

Fuck this story was awesome, easily my favorite on the site. The story fueled my jacking off for weeks! Keep writing, im sure your next story will have me cumming faster and harder than ever!

This story is great, but I just have one stupid little issue: knew is spelt with a fucking K!

Can't spell knew huh?

I so wish this would happen to me!!!!!

Your spelling was unacceptable. Learn the difference between k-n-e-w and n-e-w. Two other words you repeatedly spelled incorrectly were t-o-n-g-u-e and m-a-y-b-e. There were several others. And I have a question. Where was the sister during all of this? Worthy of no better than a C in any college composition class.

Obviously you've gotten some 'likes' but besides the butchering you did on spelling, the narrative of the story was juvenile and boring. If youbwant to better your writing skills, read & study those in the 'Hall of Fame'. Your story was feeble at best.

This was a fun story and certainly a turn-on! Really hot tease scenario you set up. Couple of changes would, in my opinion, make it better.

His being cuffed to the bed makes it confusing how he is able to perform cunnilingus, lick their abs, etc if he is secured to the bed. Also, when they flip him on top one of the girls- she would be squished under him if his hands were secured keeping him from supporting himself. Better to have the girls move onto him, onto his face, and so on while he is on his back.

When you said the condom was a year old, I was hoping you'd have it break while he was fucking. You set up the situation with the news about its age and her saying she was on the pill. The sex could have begun with him not able to feel much through the condom. She goes on and on having multiple orgasms while he is not quite able to cum. Finally, he feels something warm and wet on the tip of his cock. It feels wonderful and he cums knowing the condom has broken. It's his revenge on them for the tease.

For a fantasy unrealistic story written without proofreading to correct numerous spelling mistook shows a lack of pride in what you created.

One major flaw, Logan describes himself as shy and little experience with women, but in his sexual foreplay, where did all this deep experience in sexual foreplay and seduction to drive women to ecstasy come from ?

No wonder you only wrote one story.