by Callicious
Very well written to keep us reading and enjoying your work, I'll be looking for more on this little group.
I can't wait to read the rest! Very erotic, but very good story telling as well
Unbelievable style! Makes you really CARE about the characters. Rooting for Jared here. Keep it going.
please keep it up! must have more....faster!!! and if its not to much to ask could you possibly add more pages? it gets going good and then stops.a bit of a dissapointmen but still very good!!!!
Great writing technique. It makes your imagination wonder a little bit. Good for you man. Keep up the excellent work and good luck.