by watcher1234527
i really don't think any guy would put up with all the teasing it would drive him crazy most guys would find a way to move out to get away from the teasing keep it a little more realistic from now on
It's got the makings of a decent story, BUT you really need to edit your work before you post it or get someone else to. Spelling, punctuation, broken and incomplete sentences take away from the story.
It was completely unrealistic, lacked any remote sense of flow, lacked any sort of structure and looked like you just threw-up on paper. That's being nice.
Unbelievable that Nicky had the guts to do that to Neil and Neil doing it to Sally. Its obvious they are both teasing and letting him do them too.
Please more - thank you.