by APGilmore
i like the story but the way they talk is very old school like Victorian Era old. it doesnt really hinder the story but it kind of gets cheesy at times. still pretty good start to the story. im sure you are long gone from this site and this is a rather old story but figured id leave a comment
It seems as if you are preaching here. The church of Lesbian. Rather stilted but true feelings. Keep working on it.
I love love stories! And this has started out so wonderfully! Thank you!
This is a good story line and could be an excellent story, but I find that the language you use for the the characters is very off putting, so forgive me I did not read the rest of the story. This first chapter just leaves me with so many unanswered questions: Are they in a private school? Do they have any understanding of life? Do they really have any desires or emotions? It is just to much like a play that some man wrote that has no idea of the beauty that is woman, whether she be gay or not!
GREAT FIRST STORY. MY TEACHER, MY LOVE CH 1
CAN'T WAIT TO READ MORE OF THIS EXCELLENT EROTIC STORY.
Great start and a nice story with decent charcter development. Not much happening yet, as it is the first of 16, I guess you have a long way to go. Look forward to the rest.