All Comments on 'My Virtual String Bikini'

Shoulda had her phone on "vibrate".

Never too late to comment on a fun story. Good creative start for an exhibitionist, then it gets derailed by BDSM. Still fun.

I believe the writer is expressing her own dreams in this story...!!! ??

To be only a little disappointing, it must be rather approving, so dont get upset by the comment title. It was highly creative, and mostly well written. It was confusing when a paragraph would start with one person talking and end with another replying. You stretched the limits of credulity with the key in ice concept. In reality, what if there was a fire, or if she got sick? Hell, what about sunburn? But this is a story and not reality. You also switched from describing the wait time from several hours down to a couple of hours with fear it might end up several hours. A minor error, but still. Then, worst of the lot, you made a cliffhanger, and never followed up with a sequel! That someone is REALLY upset about that means they were drawn into your woven spiders web and feel caught in your trap. Good job, but seriously bad at the same time for not finishing and just leaving us all hanging at the end. I hope Lisa gave Brianna’s ass a public spanking for that. Or maybe her boyfriend. A little sad that character (Zack?) was as much dominated by Lisa and willingly went along with his girlfriends say-so without comment. Like a rag doll. You should read between the lines there for a suggestion on improved writing. If you can’t, very, very few submissives ever go along with anything so readily, and without comment, question or at least, facial reaction. Well, its been nearly fifteen years since your posting so I doubt i’ll ever see a new story let alone a response, so i’ll leave it there. Did Brianna ever get something put in her back pocket? I could answer that with a few suggestions but I’ll leave that as a cliffhanger for you in response (not fun is it?)

very well described

Way to go, TSB (Tiny String Bikini). Other than the multiple stories I've recently read from The Sparks Zone, I have not read anything as 'titilating' as this current example of unwilling exposure. Please write more in this vein, even completing this story to a satisfyingly sexy ending. Please write more, TSB. I'll be looking for you.

YOMEYO

looks like the trail has gone cold

Let's see, criminal trespass, abduction, extortion, rape, assault...good thing Mrs. G. liked it or Lisa would be in big trouble!

What agreat twist on being naked outside and the bondage idea was brilliant

I liked it - very imaginative!

having used her phone to stoke Brianna's fires again it would be nice if the bossy neighbor used him to put it out, and stroked him over her at the end while getting herself off.

Very nice story, it's good to see something so creative in this genre. Sounds like something I would write ;)

i can't wait for the sequel

Very creative and well written. Should I wonder why my wife has a half filled jug of water in the freezer?

Incredible X/V story, the public bondage was a nice surprise, well done!

I Truly enjoyed it, great scenario, very hot and erotic ......

I really enjoyed this! she writes very well and has a vivid imagination and is able to share it with us!