All Comments on 'Naked Day: Wrong Place; Wrong Time'

Nice job tapping into a particular fantasy. Wish there was more than one scene to it though.

As many people learned in middle school a story, to be a story, needs a beginning, middle and end. You did a fair job of a middle. Looking at your profile I see you state you are "over 18" and I believe you, barely. Your writing gives me hope for you becoming much better at storytelling.

Good luck with that.

Not sexy at all.

You can feel the terror in the words, the utter hopelessness of the situation.

But I have to say a 'happy ending' would have been nice.

HP

When you only get 7 faves out of 100,000 views, it's bound to suck.