by Justine_Bishop
Kinda short.
A single page is just a tease.
Please continue.
I believe this shows quite a bit of promise. Looking forward to future installments.
We write slow burn stories as well, and there are quite a few of us who enjoy reading them. Keep up the good work, and we can't wait to see where this goes!
The only comment I have is concerning the paragraph length. A bit shorter is an easier read. Otherwise, I'm looking forward to the next chapters.
Thanks for your feedback everybody! Too short, and shorter paragraphs. Noted.
Excellent character development so far. I enjoyed the amount of detail as well. Looking forward to reading further chapters.
I do wish we knew more about how using this power made him feel. Did he ever feel at all guilty? Did he rationalize what he was doing with his intention to leave them “better” than when he started?