by Nils Huim
So it was all a fantasy? Most of the story was great but the ending was a letdown, and the beginning was confusing as well. I thought maybe it was an unanounced sequel to another story since we joined the action midstream. Everything seemed rushed and the characters undeveloped. Lots of promise though. I gave you 4 🌟's.
This was going great until the ending. So many directions this could have gone other than the one you chose.. Cost you a star....
I won’t repeat what the others said about the ending, but despite that, this is a great, great story.
The ending was a surprise and a bit of a shock. But that ended the story. There won't be a chapter 2. So okay. Well done.