All Comments on 'Neighbor Carla'

Well, Good story, but I'm not sure if it should be in E&V category. Erotic couplings fits me more.

E & V isn't the place for this. Sure, everything starts someplace, and Lit doesn't have a White Knight section, maybe erotic couplings.

Grab an editor next time through. You need a touch of help. not bad though.

You mentioned two kids in the first paragraph?

Your story seemed to be heading to the 'Carla and Pat' live happily ever after, once Adam has gone. Then Dave appears from nowhere. Go away, Dave, you aren't needed here. You ruined a perfectly good plot. Only 1 star.