All Comments on 'Neighborhood Association (Swing)'

....and yet not enough. Its hard to juggle characters and harder still for readers to follow them.

@Rearden_Steel_2, for taking the time to comment. Especially constructive criticism. Greatly appreciated, and only helps me write better stories in the future. It was really the challenges I wrote the story for, that many people, and still making it possible for someone to follow the couple's experience. I'll keep trying...

lETS GET NASTY

I found it difficult to follow the story because there were too many grammatical errors - full stops, commas, random phrases ... I'm not even sure what actually happened in the story as it quickly shifted from a meaningless Neighbourhood Watch meeting to an orgy with confusing references to various sexual activity that I couldn't keep track of!