by AuroraIncident
All - remember this is just a story....it will get to where it needs to go in whatever time AuroraIncident chooses to take us. Just enjoy a fun story that probably reminds some of us what high school was like.
Seriously. This is like the 80s tv series Moonlighting. Lots of sexual tension that never goes anywhere.
This story is perfect. Small slices of a teenagers life. Makes me want to be 50 years younger and do it right this time. The ratings are for the story, not the editing. I think the mistakes in editing makes the story better you have to think about it instead of skimming through it. Well done so far.
Ok are seriously getting to the point of ratings utterly crashing off a three second hand job is all this series has
"and gave me home" can I edit literally all of this and you submit it again? Your plot and writing is AMAZING, seriously no lie, but the lack of effort makes it hard to read and understand
I'm really starting to get pissed off. Is Jessica going to wait until graduation before she tells Jake she's ready for a relationship and they'll both be heading off to different colleges? I'm assuming different colleges...I mean, why would they even consider going to the same school if they're not together and you need to apply to schools before the New Year, usually...so if they're not together by then...
All this teasing and girl talk, I think I'm losing man points, we a little action here................
So when she said she was a virgin, she was lying? Terribly disappointed as this was a major draw to the story, since most people are already whores or sluts by eighteen these days.
Underoos! Hahahahaha I love it! What a delightful treasure in an equally delightful story. I just found this series yesterday, and I can't put it down. I'll be bummed when I catch up and have to wait for current chapters. The dialog in this series is incredible! Thank you for sharing your extreme talents with us. My life is better for it! Bless you my friend.
Story is great overall, but I don't like that all his friends constantly put him down. If they have to do it, they should spread the comments throughout the group. Just another form of bullying.
I really look to reading it i read all of the chapters you wrote till the end of December 2018 hoping for more chapters your fan rodger
I'm still really liking it, but I gotta agree with the guy in the comment section of the first chapter: Everyone sounds kinda homogeneous.
I really love your writing, I'm not going to go on about the bad usage of First Person mixed with Third Person, just replace "I" with "Jake" and everything would be fixed there, anyway someone else already complained about that. My biggest complaint though is your use of old-timey song choices. Your story is about an 18 year old high school kid of today. So why would he be a Guns and Roses fan... or any of the songs Jake is into, they are eighties and nineties songs... shouldn't this kid be into more current music of today and if not explain why... G&R was disbanded before he was even born... Just saying (I'm a fan but I'm in my 40's).
Other than that, great writing. Love it. Keep up the great work.
I think I accidentally reported your story. If I did it was one hundred percent unintentional, my most sincere apologies.
Any ETA on the next chapter asking for an addict who loves this story.
What catches me most is the character development.
For instance;
How their lunch group started off as five. Now it's sitting at nine.
Or how Jake premièred as this, laid back, aloof and arguably generally care free underdog, and now; he actually gives a damn, seemingly acting with purpose.
The changes are done so seamlessly that it's almost hard to miss. But compare the Jake at the start to the one at the football game and the difference in tenacity is pretty much obvious. Even more so when you compare the one at the football game, to the confidence in this latest chapter. It's all so believeable.
That's just an example though. They've all got either some character progression to them, or some back story build up. Or both. Love it.
I'll keep checking in for new updates. This is quite the ride.
Thanks Aurora.
Generally Aurora’s parts post every three weeks on a Tuesday or Wednesday... in an earlier post he (I assume) said he only had internet access on Sundays...
When is the next chapter coming out? I come and check everyday for a new chapter
I cannot wait for ch. 8! More pages per chapter would be great, but of course thats all up to you, the writer. I also love how you seem to dive into the psychological side of things (mentioned in a couple other comments as well) which makes it relatable and really nails down the “why”s in the story. Stay on your own pace, don’t worry about rushing romance. I’ll check daily for ch.8! - Vertical
Ignore the people begging for sex. When it happens, it'll be perfect
Great story but would love to read something sexual between Jake and Jessica
And don't screw around with the pace just to get to the "action". It's perfect as it is.
again really enjoyed it, but you have to step up the romance with J and J
Really disappointed to learn that she wouldn't share her first time with Jake, but everything else is terrific.
All I ask is she doesn’t hurt Jake he definitely deserves a happy ending.
Thanks to "AuroraIncident" (our author here) for clearing up some of the mystery of the video sent to *everyone* in the school (whether the author had the explanation before I raised this point in a comment on an earlier (I think Part 6) installment or came up with it afterward, it was clever (and surprised me: I really hadn't thought that Patrick would be the one to spread that video) ) ; obviously (having read the other comments), the fan base for this story is holding. : )
About the revelations about Jessica: I'm not certain whether they might be an "excuse" for the slow progress that Jessica and Jake are making toward their "First Time" (and -- indeed -- they seem to contradict the implication in Part 1 that both Jessica and Jake were virgins), but I have no problem with Jessica (as a non-virgin) not being "pure" (and the fact that the story she told Staci echoes Staci's (pre-Ray) sexual experiences makes the story (as a whole) better. (I would guess that some reader assumptions about Jessica also stem from the earlier "First Time" categorization of the first installments of this story).
I'm also glad to see some more detail and talk about Jessica and Jake's parents (who were barely sketched in earlier installments) , and am glad that Coach Yates has started to move from being an automatic partisan of Patrick-and-Jamie-and-their-clique.
I also want to note that "Devir Ginator" (posting as "Anonymous" 's post looked nicely-written itself.
Time to wait a while (i guess) for Part 8; Keep up the good work, "AuroraIncident". : )
E. (or "nycreader")..
I check in every day hoping for another chapter and can't do much until i finish the chapter. I can't wait for the next one!
I am glad that this chapter has finally arrived. However, you are so good at leaving us all gagging that the anticipation level is ramping up further.
In reading some of the comments (from Why?") I disagree that the fact that Jessica is not a virgin was a throw-away. It revealed her first time was with someone who turned out to be an insensitive jerk. One could sense the pressured way it happened and that there will be a bit more back story when Jessica eventually tells Jake about her first (and only) experience. It is good that you explore the teenage angst in these matters. Not many writers on here seem to delve into the background psychology too much. You seem to have it right.
Jake and Jessica seem to be becoming the very best of friends and it is becoming glowingly obvious how much real love Jake has for Jessica. His mindfulness for not rushing Jessica to actions she would regret. Keep up the good work. It would be nice to see a few more pages per chapter, but I know that can be hard at times. Next chapter eagerly anticipated.
Devir Ginator <devir.ginator@gmx.com> (who still needs the Admins to help me get logged on).
The only thing bad about the story is the length of time between episodes. Can't wait for the next installment.
Agree, kinda sad that Jessica isn't a virgin like Jake, but I need MORE!
And of all things it kinda seems like it was forced in there as kinda a backhanded thing, like no biggie, I did it. It just doesn't seem to fit the story, or the character
Maybe I was a bit disappointed that Jessica is not as pure as Jake .. but will definitely anticipate more of this story
Begging for more soon :) You have a great talent for writing these stories, just dont make us wait so long.