All Comments on 'Night Brings the Hunter Pt. 01'

A good start to what promises to be a good story. Two minor criticisms. 1. Your spelling of the chess player's family name keeps changing. 2. Castling is not permitted in chess to get out of check.

Yeah, it wasn't until the third or fourth chapter that someone pointed out Kasparov's correct name. And I've been waiting for someone to catch the castling thing. It comes up in the final chapter that I just submitted.

I'm aware of this. It sort of sets up the premise that Helen is going to be cheating throughout the story. (*I* get to call her Helen, we go back that far.)