All Comments on 'Night Jogger'

by Mason_Hess

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AnonymousAnonymousover 8 years ago

Predictable. Once I determined what was happening, I lost interest in the story.

AnonymousAnonymousover 8 years ago
Thanks!

Contrary to what some may say, you wrote carefully enough to hint the ending without ruining the sensations she was feeling. I think I felt more willing and excited, knowing that she was not truly unhappy or unsafe.

ChiBoy44ChiBoy44over 2 years ago

Nicely done. You described the scene just enough. You might have added that she saw the knife earlier to have it seem to be just a tool he used to cut the tape with. Then spring the knife as a threat. Good story!

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