All Comments on 'Night Of Lust For A Small Woman Ch. 02'
by thekarpathianman
- 10 Comments
Anonymousabout 16 years agoI got a good case of eye strain from the frequent and over use of ... and long strings of the same character of which both could be reduced by 99.999%. Just use the proper spelling change to caps for emotion as is commonly understood item not oooooooooohhhhhhh type of junk. Many locations this kind of stuff was most of the full text and just wastes band width and storage space.
Anonymousabout 16 years agoI'm getting skeeved out over the repeated descriptions of this "woman" as a child or a baby. It's an unnerving fantasy of a mature woman who is also a tiny child -- what is it that is exciting, the maturity or the desire to have a child lover? *ick!*<br><br>
I'm not sure if you are from the U.S. or another country. I'm guessing another country because of the following:<br><br>
<i>They were all <b>blacks</b>, muscled and big, like football players. Craig was the oldest one: 34 years old and 6'6" tall; Nick was 27 and 6'4"; Tom was 23 and same heigth as Nick. ...Their original plan was to cross the near border and to join, there, the other members of the <b>clan.</b></i><br><br>
Now this was truly an unfortunate use of words. Have you heard of a hate group called the Ku Klux Klan, aka the Klan? They originated in the southern States and in years past, terrorized "uppity" blacks, including dragging them from their homes and hanging them, among other atrocities. So you just described three black convicts, on their way to join other members of their "clan." Please, if you do nothing else, edit this part of your story.
PrincessErinabout 16 years agoIt was a good effort but not my type of story. I think the story line is great however you need to improve on your descriptions. Using numbers such as age, height, breast size etc, wasn't very good. I'm sure others like this type of story and I bet you have a lot of views for this story.
