by Mused
Fantastic imagination, story line was spooky and I loved the timeline...Nice job.
The story doesn't quite follow traditional vampire mythology, but it's nicely written and very entertaining, nonetheless.
-- KVK
I was surprised how the plot went but it was amazingly good. I truly enjoyed it. Good job.
Really loved how the story went, could almost feel I was there when reading it. Fantastic read, great characters, this could still be great without it being an incest story. Gonna check your other submissions.
I really loved how the story went, Scary plot with great characters. Actually didn't need the sex to be a great story but we are at LITEROTICA after all!
I will certainly be reading more of your contributions.
I loved your story. You are a great story teller. Thanks for sharing a fine talent.
I normally denounce vampire stories, but this was wonderfully thought out. Also, it's extremely well-written. Your vocabulary is fantastic. Aside from a few gramatical errors, this story was gorgeous! I am always a silent reader, but I simply had to comment. The love between the siblings... Just enchanting. Bravo!
This was very well thought out and the true emotion that was apparent in the nightly episodes and conclusion was breathtaking. This story made my heart skip a beat as I was overwhelmed with happiness for Mark being able to obtain Love.
The theme of incest might be repulsive to most people, but if this kind of love could exist between a brother and sister, then incest could not be considered as a sin at all. Your story is very romantic and the powerful bondage between the siblings was exceptional. The story managed to make me emotional at some stages, and even brought tears to my eyes as the main characters drifted apart from each other by the death of the sister. Bravo Mused, this is one of the best romance stories ever written
Cinco Estrellas, pero una historia muy extraña a mi amigo! It was very strange.
Very well done I honestly can't put my thoughts about this story into words. Fantastic
Mused you are the best. This is the story I love to read. Please submit more chapter in this story. I am really attracted to this story and wants to read more. Please sumbit another chapter of this story.I am also a writer and publish novels and know that when people likes a story they wants to read m9re. So please take my advice and submit another chapter of this story
A sequel would be freakin awesome! Though i really don't care, just never stop writing!
The story is sweet, but you really should use a proofreader or an editor. Apart from some your/you're mistakes and missing punctuation, you consistently misspell "its" as "it's", which is really distracting, especially during the climax of the story.
That was so cool. I was ‘entranced’ beginning to end. And he got his incest impregnated sister back as well. Try explaining that to the curious grave digger from a year ago!
Seriously though that was great a good story mixed into an occult story. 5* all the way.
In mostly movies but some literature also it is discussed that to kill the Head Vampire that anyone that came after that would be turned back to normal.So for Nathan to kill the vampire Doctor who I take is the head vampire,he broke the curse on Lucy and she came back to life.
Not only that but she also is carrying Nathans child.It may not have the Hollywood Ending but this was a damn good read,not too long,but not too short either,just the perfect length.