All Comments on 'No Longer a Game Ch. 01'

Sorry, there were so many errors in grammer and spelling (repeated "if" instead of "of" drove me nuts!) that I gave up. Which is a shame as the actual story has some promise

Try using grammarly.com to edit it should catch synonyms like new - knew. The story itself is great.

Critter?

Dear future reader, do yourself a favor and stop reading this even if it seems like an exiting premise. Like many other stories here on lit the writer got bored from his own story and called it finished. Too bad that he spent the last chapter introducing new mysteries without ever resolving the existing ones. Very unsatisfying read.