All Comments on 'No Longer a Game Ch. 12'

Your output has been astounding; can't believe how quickly the chapters are coming. Thanks so much :)

I hope that Natalie is not a completely lost cause - Michael's analysis was bleak! But looks like Christie might have more hope ...

This story is amazing so far, the only thing that takes away from it are the waaayyyy too many errors. Consider grabbing an editor to polish what you're written. I don't mean to nitpick, but the incorrect placement of commas gets annoying after awhile. Other than that all 12 chapters have kept me hooked from the start. Good job and thank you for taking the time to write this for us.