All Comments on 'No Longer a Game Ch. 14'

I wish the chapters were longer... having said that... This is a great story so far.

. . . for sharing your gift. The small errors/typos and getting smaller and fewer. It will be a pleasure to watch you hone your writing skills. Great job visioning a complex plot line and character mix. Thanks again !

I am enjoying your story, but your spelling and grammar errors still are getting in the way. You should try to find an editor and/or be more thorough in your proofreading. in just the first few sentences there are about 10 errors, from "triangle," which should be, "triangular," to many missing commas and other basic issues. I'm not trying to be negative - I like your story, and it has style, but instead of posting a new chapter every day, maybe take another day to re-read and fix what you've already written.