All Comments on 'Now We Can Talk'

That was a very good "slap upside the head" to a cheating wife, nicely done in less than 800 words.

Five stars from here.

sell it brother.

As the Germans say: short and thick

Liked it! Great!!

just needs a little payback on the BF

Destroyed, but won't let her see it. Great short story

5 stars. ‘Nuff said.

Bill S.

Short, sweet and right to the point. 5 stars

Well done.

This is one cool customer but the lot would be a lot better if it was fleshed out with more meat.

One & done...cya!!

Now there’s a real man of action!! No tears or fuss… just make the decision and get everything over with!!

I still maintain the penalty for adultery should be death. Trust me there'd be a lot less cheating if the punishment was that severe. Oh well.

Some People

Just don't get the principle of a flash story, he told you he was aiming for the minimum number of words Lit will accept which is the idea of the 750 word story so many authors struggle with, it's a challenge. You can't cover everything in so few words, so most tell you ahead of time. Get over yourselves. *****'s Signed: BTW

I'm a huge BigGuy33 fan. Usually. Nor this time, sorry.

Finish the story.

I wonder how many times she had done this before as she seemed so easy with the situation, no remorse. What did she expect., "O well done dear, nice one". She got hit for her actions and in the marriage bed, really. Yes, she had no shame. No wonder he slept in the spare room, he probably would not sleep in their bed again.

Where is the story?

About the only thing unique of good about this was it was readable.

Nice, short and sweet.

Liked it. Straight to the point. No dithering around.

@ Helen1899

The reason she asked him why he slept in the guestroom is because she was fishing, trying to ascertain whether or not he'd gone straight there, in which case he wouldn't have seen the other bloke in bed with her and she'd have dodged a bullet. He let her think she'd gotten away with it for a few moments before tossing the grenade in. Excellent!

Great story

The trouble with these quickies is there isn't the space for much story .

He's come home , she's not alone , he arranges divorce .

So many questions we want answers to but that's not what quickies are about . Although there could be a follow up ? I'd be interested in that .

Honestly , there's not much to comment on . But I liked what there was .

DK . 3 *

Thanks for posting .

Stupid

Great example of zero tolerance!

Very clever!

Loved it. Cheating means divorce, dont let the snowflakes tell you any differently.

Haha really enjoyed this.

Great short short story! There are comments that show they don't understand the nature of a short short story. I get that a reader might like to know more, but this is complete with a begining, middle, and ending.

Wow....short and straight forward....🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟

Why did she ask, " why did u sleep in the guest room? " when she had a bloke in bed with her. Sorry a stupid story with no ending. What happened to the lover?

It's truly fascinating the contrived bullshit that scores here. This is pure trite nonsense. It's meaningless. Gods.

Needed an end. 3 stars.

Bill S.

Oh short and sweet, straight to the throat, love it

A nice twist to the story. He saw the guy with his wife, probably realized it's not the 1st time with him or that she cheated, but didn't say anything until the following morning, getting her off guard. Same with his refusal to talk until.... 4 stars Bob

I like the hiding what the husband saw until the next morning. Clever

3 stars - just one more cheating SLUT story, nothing unique or different

Good job!

Good for a flash story. Given that constraint I’m not sure what some readers were expecting…perhaps a 5-page flash story? I thought it was good for what it was. As usual, very well written.

Short and to the point in every category. Great, loved it.

I really enjoyed the deliberate delay tactics. Like he mowed the lawn and yanked the weeds.

He likewise could have fixed the sink, polished the car and helped Joanie make the bed (new).

And only then, you know....

BG seemed to be in some sort of hurry!!👌

Good story. This could be a great start for a longer story. What time did you hustle him out of here. What a great line that could set the stage for many more pages.

I hope you open this story up for alternate endings and continuations

fun little story!

Poor, very poor, little substance no ending

"This isn't a story but a document pf an event."

What on earth do you think a story is but a documentation of an event?

Not one of this author's better offerings, I'm afraid. The commenter who said this was not a story but a documentation of an event was bang on the money.

zero emotions.. same old crap

This is not a story but a documentation of an event, though I agree with the outcome,just upset there was no story along with it . You write from decent to great stories,stick to it,that's why we read you...JZK

Really short but yet it felt like you beat around the bush before getting to the end. I'm really not a fan of these very short stories I want more drama and detail.

Caricoa Man was right. We didn't need a lot of extraneous BS; The MC had all the information he needed so get on with plans.

Perfect ending. Sometimes the poor little me drama isn't needed

Way too abrupt ending. Lost 2 stars.

Loser I’ve ever given B. G.

Bill S.

I could never do that. 2am is a great time to fire a 12 gauge into the bedroom ceiling to say "Hi honey, I'm home!".

short and right to the point. excellent

As someone below said right... "they will always complain if it's 6 pages or if it's only 1".

It didn't matter to me if there wasn't character development, if some of the details were left out, or forgotten.

The message was given. The bitch was served, at the right time and that was it.

What, at least to me, sounds appropriate is: the pain of retribution must be proportionate to the slut's betrayal. She betrayed, without much fanfare, he took it, she disguised it, he confronted her, she collapsed...

No violence, no screaming or any deviation from rationality. It was a burn the bitch.

According to the author's molds, or his desire for the moment. End of the line. If she would be miserable, and he was happy and full of beautiful women, that doesn't matter.

Let your imagination go. Or, you send commentary comments to the directors, screenwriters and authors of the dilmes you watch.

Ah... this is fiction!!! BG33 in this short, thought so. And period.

4 stars. The husband was cold and calculating. He responded quickly to the betrayal, without losing his composure. As for the future ex-wife, she was just a bitch.

But that's just my opinion.

...sang, "You can't please everyone, so you've got to please yourself."

When you write a 6 pager, commenters complain it's too long. When you write a one pager, commenters complain it's too short. We can only hope, both complaints don't come from the same commenters.

Nice shortie, BG.

Keep 'em comin'.

To copy a comment by 'anonymous'

Too short: no development as to how he saw her with the other man, etc. Was disappointed, which is not my usual feeling after reading on of your stories. 2**

Too short: no development as to how he saw her with the other man, etc. Was disappointed

Totally satisfying story, even the ending.

Pay no mind to those who think the woman needs to be shot and buried or the other guy needs an ass kicking (of course unless the other guy was a friend he did no wrong, the spouse did, but the little penis, testosterone driven knuckle draggers need that type of ending) his build up to the end was spot on, in ways many others dont manage even with a total BTB and run the other guy over with a steam roller. No hand wringing, no drawn out benders, no waffling, just give her enough room to think it wasnt over and then he dropped the hammer.

With no revenge on the guy, no revenge on the wife and the story not revealing whether the protagonist moved on to a happy life without the wife, this story is cute but missing anything to bring the guy any satisfaction.

GREAT!!!

As they say, "Best served cold"

Great story from the real BigGuy33.

Take that, bitch!

Short and sweet, love it!

Made me laugh. Great story.

I'm more hands on. Maybe a Bat or gun too...

A great, simple and to the point btb story.

Im not sure even some of those 10 page War and Peace wannabe's can do what you did in one page.

Getting served divorce papers is the only way to start talking to your soon to be ex-wife.....yaaaaaaaaaa

Again, one of the best very short stories on LW. Amazing to get so much said with so few words.

I Loved The Payback .. Good Story

Lol.

A Good Story that got 5 Stars from Me .. Keep up the good work

There is more to the main point; he wasn't going to be a willing cuckold, nor was he going to fight for something that She didn't think had enough value to be preserved. Signed: BTW

Another straight to the point good story.

Enjoyed

Short and good

Such a perfect little story. It just forces me to read it again.

@Anonymous Re: "the author cheated" - Normally I'd agree with you, but since the reason he didn't join her in bed was revealed early and NOT saved to the end, I can live with it. In any case, the main point was that he wasn't going to talk until she was served.

"I found Joanie, as expected, fast asleep and I knew any attempt to get into bed would wake her, so I just went down the hall and crashed in the spare room. I was really too tired for anything else anyway. I was asleep in seconds."

Nothing there to indicate anything upsetting. What's worse is that not only was he asleep in seconds but his reason for not getting into bed with her was that it would wake her, not that there was someone already in his place.

The author was actively misleading us as to the state of affairs so that the later conversation would surprise the readers.

get more out of so few words than that. Well done.

nothing really needs to be said

A story does not have to be long as Tolstoy to be good. This is my kind of story. No extraneous details. The details of the story delivered through conversations between husband and soon-to-be ex-wife. Can lightning strike twice? Produce another story similar to this one and I will read it.

What's there to talk about, BAM, nicely done

Agree with 26thNC, there's nothing to talk about. She cheated; it's over.

Luedon's contention that cheating can make the marital relationship stronger is pretty much clueless. There's no love in cheating; it's just an act of selfishness. Selfishness does not make a relationship. But, I just consider the source. I use her comments as a guide. When she likes a story, it's a tell the cheated husband took the blame himself and let his cheating wife off the hook without consequence. ** Puke **

I like BG33 holding off the revelation of the other guy to the next day by making it part the conversation with the MC's soon to be ex-wife.

no talk, no need for answers and one single death stroke

A chcken shit way to handle the problem

even if he doesnt wish to kill anything. TK U MLJ LV NV

Read all the comments this time. Seems.like SJ against the world. A lot of comments, but none that changes my mind. He found his wife in his bed with another man. No explanation needed, no excuse, it's over. Great story.

Maybe it would have improved the story.

Really wished when I was younger I just done that. Really ended up hurting myself more. I learned, but never needed it again.

"weeds that had elbowed their way into the garden"

So quick it's almost surgical. Why drag it out? Good story very well told.

short sweet and to the point, Also ignore swingerjoe.. like he said in his comment who the fuck is he, " call someone out." please ive read your stuff the only people you can call out are all the men who you let fuck an cum in "your" women. just shut it

This story has been discussed to death by all the big guns, and quite a few pop guns. I'll just say that I liked it a lot.

I know I'm way behind the heated comment here last year.

But damn, is the whining of swingerjoe anoying!

Somebody tell him to listen to Hank Williams Jr's

"Attitude Adjustment".

He needs one.

From my POV some readers don't get the picture here.

This is a flash story.

But it's dripping with humour.

First we are told of the wife sleeping

and the kindness of not disturbing her sleep.

Only to be told the next morning, that there

was no room beside her, in the bed, for him (lol).

Then there was the mowing of the lawn.

Who doesn't see that as funny?

Yes, I know he's waiting for the divorse papers,

but for me he's pissing her off.

What a wonderful thing that is to piss off a selfish slut (lol).

In true form of a flash story many things are missing.

But so much said in so few words!

This story is one of my favorites.

Absolutely top ratings from me!

SJ said, "To each his own, but if a story doesn't fit your taste, how about just shut the fuck up about it."

Words to live by, Joe!

Quick and to the point!

Lean clean consequences machine.

A man with virtue.