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She deserved her fate but more so her cheating boss who’s really going to suffer losing everything.

Just to finish Deb off though ld still send the movie to her family, friends and priest.

That would teach the conniving bitch a lesson she would never forget for the rest of her rotten life.

4/5

Well they were both cheaters for some time. Unclear if she started first. Six months? They and already been back together a few months after "Candy" incident before he found out. Of course a divorce was absolutely necessary. But sounds like.she went for boss during time frame he went for Beth. Again wasn't clear. Ending was rushed. No conversation or confrontation at end. Just nada.

Utter garbage. Blowjob are OK but really not relationship breaking must haves, and anal has historically been a Catholic method of contraception, so why would she be so set against it.

The real question here is how shit was he, so her boss can get her to do stuff but the hubby is just too inadequate to be able to persuade her from such a deep seated position.

Yeah I know it's just a bs LW story, but seriously, leaving questions unanswered and characters unexplored just turns the wife into a cypher a vehicle to hate upon women. Which I guess is what your readers want.

Would have liked more conversation after her hypocrisy was revealed. Good ending to the series.

These two adulterers dig a progressively deeper pit of depravity the longer they remain together. If this is the true nature of humanity, our extinction from climate change cannot happen soon enough. It will be only fitting that we were the agents of our own demise.

Convoluted. Far fetched. But I liked that the slut and her boss got burned. And that Steve finally got away from her.

Crappish Femdom agitprop.

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Lame ending. She goes from aggrieved conservative wife who gets cheated on for not giving blowjobs to a full on slut banging her boss well before the end of Chapter 2 finale. Disappointing. Should have ended at Chapter 2 and with "you reap what you sow". Instead we get a gangbang BTB ending with her suddenly becoming dominant in the bedroom, controlling him with sex. Yuck.

@Anonymous

If you've just GOT to have blowjobs; don't marry a bitch who doesn't give them! What a DUMBASS!

No yer the DUMBASS, he didn't know cuz she wouldn't have sex until after marriage!

Total rubbish

Hated it ! Wished I could give it a "0."

If you've just GOT to have blowjobs; don't marry a bitch who doesn't give them! What a DUMBASS!

Two lessons here. One, communication is essential. You don't buy a car without test driving it first, you shouldn't marry without knowing if you're sexually compatible.

Second, leave those "born again" hypocrites alone. Worst kind of people....

This part is not as good as the first two. This last part seemed a little rushed.

Can not say I blame Steve. Saturday night sounded real sweet as revenge. Thanks for your writing.

YES!… bitch got what she deserves! Thank-you

I think it's funny that some of the commenters do not understand what they've just read. He did a great job of reconciling his position as well as hers. LP

Moral of the story? Always find out what will or won't happen before putting a ring on it...

where is the revenge? all he did was divorce her

This was a very boring story.

He brought it all on himself... I have no sympathy for him whatsoever and he will continue to implode... he hasn't a clue and is so self-centered and hypocritical that the blindfold was an apt metaphor for his condition... pity the next woman he is involved with.

Didn't remember that ending, but she was cheating on him and playing stupid mind games at the same time.

One minute she's getting off on controlling him, the next day she wants him back, but has a "few issues to work through?" Then she's STILL playing games!

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"He always wanted to be in charge," - I have to ask again, where was that?

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After the fuck session when they left the counselor's, why couldn't she finish him off with a blow job?

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"we have to consider each other's feelings," - Except that she's not considering his feelings.

I actually feel much more sorry for her, than for him, when all is said and done. HE turned her into what she became, because of HIS selfish wants. Compromise with someone you truly love is part of marriage. He was not prepared to Compromise anything; so did he really love her??

The wife's character is totally inconsistent from one chapter to the next, a sure indication of a poorly planned story.

not at all consistent with the original at all.

Too late to continue this fucked up story. I got a few paragraphs into this and shut it down. Didn't get half way through the first page.

I'm thinkin writer got such bad feedback after the first part and wanted to change it up. Worst one by Slirpuff.

The author should probably have stopped after the first chapter, the story became increasingly nonsensical. The characters all over the place.

This seems to be two radically different stories. The beginning was unique if not juvenile. I am curious how many men would throw away a solid, loving, marriage with frequent satisfying sex and intimacy because the wife wouldn't give him a blow job.

Maybe I'm old fashion, but that storyline seems inane.

More importantly, the characters in the second and especially the third chapter bear no resemblance to chapter one.

Disappointing.

Great revenge on the cheating, frigid slut!!! Name the video, Debbie does everybody!!! BTB at its finest!!!

Debbie had mental damage. But at least it explained her hateful actions of part 2. I liked reading this chapter the best.

How come if she won't suck her husband's cock because she hates it ,she will suck her bosses?.

Of your work, but I trust you got rid of a nightmare or two of your own. Only ever had one girlfriend say she didn't want to kiss me after I went down on her, amazing how I always needed a towel or tee-shirt to wipe off my soaked face because she really didn't like it. The quickest way to get her wet was give her something to slurp on, but do not ever cum in her mouth. Needless to say we didn't get married. As for the comment about a woman not giving a blowjob to her husband but willing to give it to someone else, are you that naive? In my younger days and this was long before it was so prevalent in porn, I knew plenty of anal virgins who never came close to giving it up even when they were married. Several had tried it but the men thought if they just shoved it in the wife would 'get used to it.' A couple actually allowed it once and the idiot was too rough. All it took was earning trust, preparation over a few weeks, a lot of lube and be gentle. No tricks, just let them adjust and take the lead in how or if they wanted it. Set up a safe word in necessary and stop if she says stop. It always worked except with one girl, she didn't seem to like anything and we didn't get married either. But I have to agree, no one changes like Debbie did unless there were mental health issues, this woman was pure Jekyll and Hyde and I WAS married to one of those. Signed: BTW

ABOUT TIME YOUR MALE CHARACTER GREW A SET OF BALLS!

the "hero" was a complete douche and Deb was changed in every chapter.

What if Deb "needed" to fuck him with a strap on? Would he be wrong in refusing her needs? Why is she wrong if she doesn't like bj's?

Only an okay story. Deb was schizophrenic, three different people across all the stories.

Never sure who was in what chapter; Deb A - Deb B - Deb C - Steve A - Steve B - Steve C.

If just to align the characters, this needs a proper rewrite.

was crap

completly different characters

Chapters two and three were about an entirely different woman than Chapter one.

I like a BTB, but this wasn't your finest moment.

These characters were unrecognizable from the ones from the first two chapters. She goes from a puritan to a complete S&M slutbag who's letting her boss fuck her in the ass and trying to dominate her husband? Yeah, no. Terrible story with a cliche cheating wife story revenge plot. It had none of the impact that the first two chapters did.

Once again the convenient overheated phonecall where the lovers detail what they do and how long they have been doing it.Another flaw is the fact if she wouldn't give her husband a blow job she isn't going to blow her boss.Under what circumstances would that ever take place.

Bloated story about an obtuse cuck wimp husband. More proof that author is a wimp. Glad he is not writing anymore.

Debby she DOES, TK U MLJ LV NV

Were these even the same characters from the first two chapters?

If Debby doesn't like giving her husband blow jobs ,how on earth is she going to give her boss one?

I think is she's been holding out all a long. She's been cuckolding him from the get go.

Debbie goes from slut to born again Christian and back to slut. She wont blow her husband (it's vile!),wont do anal and is not ready to experiment. But - she does it all with her boss and is now the consummate whore!! Betty makes a guest appearance and Jason brings in a little drama, then disappears Not worthy of Slirpuff.3*s.

Why if she won't blow her husband would she blow her boss?.

finish. A little formulaic but good. Might have been more interesting to explore the relationship dynamic of his finding out she was pussy whipping him but not cheating on him.

reads all of these cuck and LW stories and then boitches about them and bashes the writer? It's because annony is insane. His wife drove him to that by fucking over a 100 men while she was married to this cum eating fag!!!

This is one of the most idiotic and cop-out endings to an otherwise interesting and enjoyable tale that I've ever read. For the first two chapters Steve is a selfish, cheating dickhead who leaves the wife he professes to love because she won't give him a blow job. The ending of chapter 2 reinforced Mister Shallowness as a grade A dick and his wife, finally realising the futility of trying to turn him into a man, walks away with her head held on route to sue for divorce.

But wait a minute. Women aren't allowed to win in Loving Wife tales. So, in chapter 3, the Dickhead husband is suddenly transformed into the victim of a cheating, manipulative wife who then feels the wrath of his 'righteous' revenge. Total bullshit. This ending isn't remotely supported by the previous chapters and seems to be little more than a pathetic attempt to appease the BTB lunatics who demand that regardless of how big a dick the husband is, the wife is always in the wrong and must suffer in the end. Depressing. Elevated writing skills sabotaged by deficiency in the gonad department.

LA

Isn't it surprising that when the husband over years a phone call the two lovers say each others named ,what they and how long they have been doing it.If Debbie wouldnt give her husband a blow job ,why on earth would give her boss one.Finally he should never have taken her backafter the night of his birthday ,she had obviously picked up her skills fucking someone else.

Isn't it surprising how the lovers always talk about what they do and how long they have been doing it,in over heard conversations!.

Another one cut short.What happened to them both after the S Saturday night would have been helpful.

She got exactly what she deserved in the end. So did he, though it took awhile to get there.

Where in the world did this chapter come from? Control freak husband? Cheating bitch of a wife? Makes no sense. It's almost like it was written by another person.

Wow. This third chapter is like one author trying to finish another author's story - and not bothering to pay attention to the original story. Where did the "control freak" husband come from? When did the time with a second counselor happen? When did the husband ever think it was okay to get blowjobs from another woman? He believed it was cheating from the beginning, as did the woman he was with, and she even warned him he would eventually be caught. Where did the cheating scheming whore in chapter three come from? She wasn't anything like the Debbie you wrote in the first two chapters.

This chapter is just so bizarre and absurd: you've opened so many holes in your original story line. And what's the deal with the gang-rape? Yes, it's rape. She didn't agree to have sex with all those men, so it's rape. Even if he could set it up that way, what did it prove? Why would the men allow themselves to be recorded?

I really thought the first two chapters were silly; a poorly contrived premise, shallow characters, surreal behavior by both spouses, etc. This third chapter though, if it has any redeeming value at all, is that it serves to make the first two look shrewd and sensible by comparison.

Annony is the fucking joke on here. This insane fucking fool reads every one of these stories and then bitches abut them. His brain is fucked up because his dead wife cheated on him his entire marriage. He is mentally ill!! Just remember if the asshole of LIT, annony, hates a story it must remind him of his dead wife and therefore it's good.

You had a good story going a few mistakes not explaining how he found out who she was seeing. I can tell you just wanted to shut everyone up. You rushed the ending left out her response as to why she did. It if she really loved him.

Wild child when young, then extremely vanilla sex only after being "born again". Then cheating with her married boss, suddenly and inexplicably doing all the things she wouldn't do for her husband. Then her husband has her raped by six guys as revenge. Too many problems with everything in this story. No one is likable in this story, the reader cares about no one.

The hang-wringing wimps whining about rape have zero case She did it all willingly and it was totally consensual. The tape would prove it without a doubt - no force or coercion used and her eager participation would annihilate any question of being too drunk to resist. Since she was already a serial cheater, she could not possibly object on the basis that she would never have done those men if she had know they were not her husband.

Like she planned to do to hubby. The bitch got what she wanted, just not the way she wanted it. Poetic justice indeed.

The video should make the trial quick and assure he and his friends get long sentences.

I did like the line about her "boss was giving me private lesions at lunch." That's one kinky woman!

on many levels. For just one, totally out of character for her to go from prim to hussy like that. Also, clumsy writing.

This was rape, plain and simple. The men could be done on one count each and he could face 6 charges of complicity. The tape would provide incontrovertible evidence and the court would doubtless throw the book at them.

Richardcmay@gmail.com

Youtube not U-Tube, not the first mistake the author has made when it came to basic computer usage, he must be almost completely computer illiterate.

Another dissapointing chapter of this truly disappointing story. Hate it to the the least.

Revenge what not enough

That word sums it all up.

Really is that the end. I'm always so fond of murder and mayhem. You just let the end drop off out of site. Not good!

Finally, a decent btb effort.

might as well go full throttle. TK U MLJ LV NV

She totally changed her character just so the author could produce a clever ending, how is that a good story?

ps I was one of those you predicted would hate it but I doubt I was in the minority there.

First I am generally amused the importance many men put on blow jobs and anal sex. Me I am a pussy man. A pussy has two functions. A conduit for a baby. And a warm tunnel for me to rest and rejuvenate in ecstasy. Love to tongue it. Play with my fingers in it. Swallow its juices.

Blow jobs are like watching paint dry. If the woman I am with loves doing it I will give it a go. Basically it is a warm up and does not do much for me. Twice I had been with women for a time that it was the major way they wanted to have sex. They had orgasm after orgasm that way. Had to break it off since our turnons were so different. Have only had one orgasm that way even with two women who declared they were the best and could go all night. Did not happen. My only orgasm that way is my present wife because she wanted her love to give me an orgasm that way. It finally did but was a trial.

As for anal sex have done it but do not like it much. Initially the tightness of the sphincter makes it a wow. Then once in that hole that tightness is too much and the passage too loose. Little feeling except for that one spot. I light the pussy with its wetness and warm and how it accepts the dick with all its positions and angles and speeds. This story lost me in the need he had for blow jobs. Felt sorry for him.

I am disappointed that the author took the plot lines he did. First there is no exposition on how the wife went from this reborn Christian to slut again. A major weakness. I could see her wanting to get back with him and doing what she did. Her behavior had no explanation for what came in her characterization. The plot had some major holes in it because her behaviors was so disconnected.

The the denouement- it is rape period. I understand the BTB group. Any revenge is OK for the sin of infidelity. You know however that she may have been getting revenge for his infidelity. How come it was not ok for her to have her revenge and was for him. If not plagiarism I would take these characters through arrest, trial and incarceration. They need to be punished for this deed. It is not moral and is wrong. She thought it was one person not 6. She did not consent in any way to it. Under the law they are guilty. They would deserve to pay. Neither one was without guilt of mistreating the other. His went far beyond hers.

I have always enjoyed the way Slirpuff wrote. His prose just glides across your brain. Plots were entertaining. This story was too much for me when he did not consider they both did wrong. The original problem was his own doing. The therapist was right. As so many of the writers here have said when the wife has wanted to have something sexual the husband was not providing then they should have divorced then found that. Why does this not apply here. He loves her so he does it. Is that not what so many of the wives have said in the stories. For our readers why is the forgiveness greater for the man going outside the marriage than it is for the woman.

When you look up BTB in the dictionary I think this story is the definition. OUCH! That was some revenge. I'm still not sure how it got this far. Not that it wasn't well written, but how did she turn into a whore for her boss? Why, if she wouldn't give her husband head or her ass, would she give it to her married boss? That was a little hole in this story. And drunk or not he didn't recognize his wife's voice? If he was THAT drunk how does he even get an erection? Another little hole. Overall an entertaining, if irritating read.

For a while I thought Steve was wimping out. Big surprise for me, that. On the other hand, the ending left me unsatisfied, in a vague way. I guess it's because we have to assume her angst at being filmed and served. I think some photographic proof of her motel visit, with the JPB trick of mailing it to himself anonymously, and showing the aftermath of her family knowing why the divorce. Another commentor did have it right in that you don't have to try to please everybody, but DO have an ending.

“How do I know that he won't find another Beth?” – He only found Beth because you refused blow jobs. If you continue to give him blow jobs he’ll have no reason to look for another Beth.

Where did the earlier parts indicate that their relationship was other than an equal partnership? In the earlier chapters everything was great except that she wouldn’t give him blow jobs.

Given her wild past, why did she need lessons? Besides simply wanting some action on the side?

that's your nick name isn't it? I gave the story a 5 for effort and content. Eat it annony you fucking fag

Couldn't get your 2inches up for this one? Can't stroke to a story unless a guy eats cum? Don't worry, plenty of loser cuck stories out there for self hating shitheads like you to have wet dreams about.

ruined by chapter three.

You can't invent a character, closely define her personality, sexual preferences and red line, with oral being an absolute no no, and then, at the stroke of a key, have her become a totally different person. It really was that quick. Moral principles reversed in an instant with no development or explanation.

Minor point; was the counsellor who told Steve that it was all his fault, the same one who told him to accept Deb's revulsion at oral? OK, I know it's only a story.

It's a damned story, fiction, ideas from the author's mind and it's submitted here as make believe. No one has claimed that it really happened, so where's the crime? Who ya gonna call? Where's your proof that anyone has done anything wrong? Let 'em read the story and laugh at the silly assed 'Guard House' lawyers as we used to call them in the military for advocating action based on a fictitious story. Fuck you whiners.

Slirpuff gave his misogynist fans exactly what they have been whining for. Another excuse for their deep seated hatred of women. He knows his target audience.

The contradictions do not matter. This is not about reason or rational thought. These type of stories are to feed the addiction for hating women of the spelunking trolls of the BTB lynchmob.

I'm going with Anon 01142015 - her sudden skill level was never explained nor her sudden change in attitude about sex.

five stars. Very interesting storyline. She got what she deserved, but so did he. He doesn't have much to complain about. He screwed around on her. She did likewise. She was certainly more ruthless in her cheating. As others have noted, while you took time to develop her character as prim and proper, you spent zero time developing her transformation. That's a big whole in your work. It's not hard to make the jump - she suffered a traumatic event in finding out her husband cheated, etc. but still, good writing at least tries to shed some light on significant changes in plot and characters.

She's separated from Steve because she's too "vanilla" in the bedroom. Why would this supposedly good christian girl suddenly take up with her married boss and start giving him oral and anal sex? It makes no sense other than to further this weak plotline. Then to get revenge he sets her up to be raped by multiple men and he FILMS it? Nothing like making a film of your committing a crime. You don't think she would have gone crazy, gone to the hospital to have a rape kit done and then to the Police? She saw who was there. Even if Kenny and Dale didn't fuck her, they were guilty be just being there. Even if she can't get the tape I guarantee you Kenny or Dale testifies against Steve in open Court to get a lesser sentence. Face it. Steve's going to jail and Debby is going to get a divorce and keep whatever assets there are from the marriage. Not a good plan. In fact - EPIC stupidity. You must have written this mess in a hurry because you couldn't have put much thought into it. He would have been better off hiring a PI to get actual pictures of Debby and her boss fucking and then ruined them with the PI's report rather than setting himself up for jail time. Dumb, dumb, dumb.

What's wrong with you that you don't seem to be able to write suitable endings. Ok, Deb stuffed up & did something very stupid when she cheated with her boss, but shit, Steve's idea of revenge to gang rape her is so far over the top that it's unrealistic; only a person with a twisted mind would come up with an idea like that. I'm fairly sure she'd have a very good case to press charges against him for setting it up & then videoing it; I think the cops would love it that he'd provided the evidence of any charges against him. Just stupid, both the plot & writer. A lucky 1 *

"He always wanted to be in charge," and angry Deb told them both. "When we ate, what we ate, when we made love and what we did were all controlled by Steve."

Where in the story did it say that? All he ASKED for was some oral sex. He may have WISHED je was in charge, LOL!

Usually don't comment except in thanks, but---I just didn't like the six guy bang. And, videoing it ?, furnished unrefutable evidence of multiple rape. Not rated

tom anon

what was really accomplished, TK U MLJ LV NV

She became what she hated. Revenge is never really satisfying. In the end, you are still hurting and you diminish youself.

you warned us we might not like the ending and I didn't'. You had many ways to go but chose a completely unsatsifying one. I almost gave up on this story many times but continued as I've always liked this author's work. I'm sorry I wasted the time to complete it.

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go back home and lick the cum for your wife's lover out of their asses

It was a good story and then you cave and write this ridiculous tripe to appease the very vocal, women haters that hate cheating sluts, but have no problem with the same behavior from a guy.

Not as much fun as chaps uno and dos.

I guess it is what it is. First the husband cheats because his wife was too vanilla then the wife cheats getting more adventurous. They shouldn't have been together all along so the divorce comes in at the right time. I've read better but all's well that end's well.

Chapter one has her practically rabid against providing oral sex, even refusing to kiss him after he'd provided her with oral sex...

She flipped out on him any time he tried anything EVEN when she was sufficiently inebriated...

Ok, so fine we now know a trait that is her... something that should then take an extraordinary series of events to change...

The idea that she would then go and have an affair and not only engage in those very actions but become very good at them just goes against who you defined her as.

If after all of that time she wasn't going to try to change for the husband she loved there's no believable she'd change for a lover of even less emotional connection.

You just swapped personalities in a way that makes the story a farce. Why bother creating a personality for a person if you're just going to throw it away to make your story go somewhere else...?

and a fertile valley is in view. TK U MLJ LV NV

but I wasn't disappointed either. He cheated for satisfaction (Clinton-esque) because of her inaction; she fucked around (Kennedy-esque) to get back at him and for her own satisfaction; and he closed the book. Thank you for a full and complete story even Huedog might have liked. (HD, are you out there?)

Sorry Slirpuff but you really dropped the ball on this third chapter of "Now What?"

The first chapter was an adequate build up explaining the problems besetting Steve and Deb marriage. And the second chapter was absolutely fantastic expansion of this story. One of your best small pieces of writing.

But this third chapter was an obviously hasty effort, with cartoon caricatures for characters. You just slopped it out to please a handful of commentators who accept such dreck with pride. Swine wearing a pearl necklace about their necks.

... comes out of his CUCK closet to really, really punish the SLIMY CHEATING WHORE wife?!? Wow SirCUCK YOU REALLY KNOW HOW TO DISH OUT THE PUNISHMENT TO THE INNOC... err cheating wife???

Maximum punishment for the faithful husband ..... Gloss over & minimize the deceit of the CUNT ... RIGHT SIRSUCk!?!