by DonElvira
Less is more. Anything left in the thesaurus you may have mistakenly left out?
Truly profound bit of writing here, kinda casts a bit of a shadow when a,
Monolith? like this comes down.
But that's what I like about it, dark, rammed to the guts with symbology and knowledge. It's punk.
Main character's a bit of a dick with a great name.
5 fave, and something a little different, cause I would like a sequel.
There were so many instances where I couldn't help just smiling at the way you put things. It gets a little more interesting than your average sex story when it exhibits intelligence strewn through this report of an educated man being reduced to nothing but lust. Enjoyed it very much.
I have no clue what this story is about or what the writer is trying to tell us. The prose was well developed but not the plot. Thanks for writing.
It is some achievement to make your narrator self-parodic yet at the same time just sincere enough to give us some genuinely sexy images. And the little twist at the end made me laugh out loud. I loved it. Thank you.
Very Nabokovian, if I may generously extend the comparison to an erotic short story on the internet. I wondered if it was a deliberate stylistic imitation.