All Comments on 'Nurse Demoness Ch. 01'

Either get an editor or at least read what you have written before you publish it. Or if English is not your first language, get someone to translate for you.

Re-reading ones work is always good but what that last comment failed to mention was how much promise this story has. Keep it up for the both of us, ok.

Please keep writing. Comments like the first one are not only rude but may keep some promising up and coming writers from continuing to start what may be some very entertaining reading. I suppose that the comment was from someone who writes so well themselves that they want to remain anonymous because they are a published writer who does not want to taint their name or bring shame to their publisher. Please carry on and continue to write. I look forward to the next chapters as I am sure others are as well.

You need to have someone read your stories as in proof reading. There were enough words that the auto correct placed the wrong word there. It meant I had to go back a proof read it to understand what you meant and thus killed the flow of the story. It also looked like you hurried at the end because the amount of errors increased and the story became more chopped. I look forward to more of your stories but they do need some work.

Ed

So many wrong word choices made that it can distract from the story while the reader tries to figure out what the writer meant.

You have a good story idea, but without proofreading it misses greatness.